shanyangshuhua 发表于 2010-9-29 15:58

再写《岳阳楼记》，请猛批

前天写的岳阳楼记，毛病不少，自己看着也不满意。今天有时间，又写一遍。请各位书友多多指教。

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廖祥文个人书法 发表于 2010-9-29 16:43

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耕耘斋 发表于 2010-9-29 18:57

还有许多地方可以推敲，虽然我不知道怎么写会更好。:shutup:

shanyangshuhua 发表于 2010-9-30 11:51

回复 3# 耕耘斋


多谢指教以前我是临的多
现在想把重点转到创作上
毛病肯定很多
请不吝赐教

真森林 发表于 2011-4-7 15:58

回复 4# shanyangshuhua


    一点拙见：写字要沉得住气，尤其是大篇幅作品。你的这篇岳阳楼记写到后边明显现出有点儿不耐烦情绪。大家这样即成精品，但我辈乃一凡夫俗子也......

shanyangshuhua 发表于 2011-4-7 16:23

回复 5# 真森林


多谢指教
定当改正

吴旭岳 发表于 2011-4-7 22:43

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